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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 to 2017.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 to 2017.
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The line graph compares the
number
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 of tourists who visited Caribbean
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island
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islands
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particularly
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 over a period of nearly seven years.
It is clear that
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 the
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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,
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 and the total
number
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 all rose in the following years. What’s
more
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visitors
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 would
chose
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 to stay on
cruise
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ships
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 than to stay on
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island
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the island
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. In 2010, the
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number
 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 was around 0.25
million
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, compared to 0.55
million
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of
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visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 and 1
million
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of
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in
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 total. The total
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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was
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seen
a
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sustainable rose from 1
million
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 in 2010 to 2.55
million
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 in 2016. The figure for
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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ships
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 rose by 0.5
million
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 in 2011 and in 2012, it increase gradually to the
number
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 of 1.5
million
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 in 2016.
This
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 figure for
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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 remained relatively stable until 2015, when it started to decline gradually to 1.25
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 in 2016.
By
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2016, a more significant rose was seen between 2016 and 2017, with the
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 of tourists
reached
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 a peak of 3.5
million
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 in 2017.
Besides
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, the trend of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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 and staying on
cruise
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ships
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 achieved 1.5
million
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 and 2
million
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 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, island, visitors, cruise, ships, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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