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Band 6.5

you recently bought a second-hand car from a company that sells used cars, but the car developed some problems. You have phoned, left messages and sent emails, but you have not heard anything from the company that sold you the car. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter •explain the problems you have had in contacting the company, and explain your dissatisfaction •describe the problems with the car •tell the manager what you want him to do You should write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to complain about issues with the recently purchased Toyota Corolla secondhand car bearing registration # CAM2233. I have been trying to reach out to your company via a phone call, a voice message and an email, but no one sent a response yet.
As a result
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, I am totally disappointed
about
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 the way your company
offering
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the
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apply
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after-sales customer services. After 2 weeks of the purchase, the car started to give trouble. the signal lights and brake system of the
vehicle
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 have not been functioning well.
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, the
vehicle
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 is parked in my garage and now I am facing many issues
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 the lack of a
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 for my travelling. Especially I am unable to report to work on time. As I have purchased an extended warranty from your business, the
vehicle
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repairing
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 can be done by your company. So I demand you to book an appointment for repair and to provide a replacement till the completion of the work to get rid of my issues. I look forward to hearing from you. Your Faithfully, Aravinda

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task achievement
The letter addresses all the points in the task prompt, providing clear details on the problem, but it could improve by offering more specific suggestions or elaborations on the required actions.
coherence cohesion
While the letter is logically structured, consider improving paragraph transitions and ensure each point flows smoothly into the next for better coherence.
task achievement
You have addressed each part of the prompt systematically, providing a complete response to the task.
task achievement
Your writing maintains a professional and polite tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for a complaint to a company's manager.
coherence cohesion
The structure of your letter is clear, with defined paragraphs, each focusing on a single idea, ensuring that the information is easy to follow.
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