There are many different types of music in the world today why do we need music . Is the traditional music of a country more important than the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays

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These days
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in the
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why do
people
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want
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.
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Is the local
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of a
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more significant than the international
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that is
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heard everywhere today? I will discuss
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topic and give my opinion
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with, there are more different types of
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in the
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such
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as classical, pop, rock
music
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,
traditional
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and traditional
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music
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. Most
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like to
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Classical
music
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but it
change
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on
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gender Girls or female like romantic or classical
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but boys like to listen
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to roack
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rock
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is more popular than the other Countries
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is
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language,
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and
people
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. English song is more popular in our
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, we need
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because all h
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like to
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music
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.
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they
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interested
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subject.
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is a language that
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can
relax our mind. I think
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is good medicine
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our body. Some
people
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listen to inu sie because they can
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lagitional
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traditional
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is tant than the
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international oral
music
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, import all
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appreciate
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traditional
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. fra 19
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is very stunning because it has included
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the tradition
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and history of the
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of adults
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who prefer
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to
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music
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. I think it is a good advantage.Traditional
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being protect
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country
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identification. Any
people
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like to
listen
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their
country
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music
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. I think it is a
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habit
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traditional
music
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is not extinct in the
world
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. traditional
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shows
identification
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the identification
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of the
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. So I think, traditional
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is
important
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more important
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than the international In conclusion, I have
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, There are many
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kinds
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of
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,
why
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and why
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we want
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and
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last
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the last
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paragraph I discussed traditional
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music
is more important than
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international
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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