Although parents are responsible for raising a child, outside influence plays a key role in their development. To what extent do you agree or disagree

In recent years, the phenomenon of young individuals tending to hang out without

parents

is happening constantly

while

abundant of

parents

are against it.

Although

some adults agree that

kids

should have more life and failure experiences to become mature humans, I disagree that it would be a positive trend in the foreseeable future. First of all, the most attractive matters for

kids

are celebrities, including singers, movie stars, and internet celebrities which can make them feel delighted and exhilarated because they can discuss with friends, be the popular people in their groups and connect to the world.

However

, there are abundant scam advertisements and cheaters involved on the internet which they cannot recognize properly. If children have not been taught how to distinguish themselves from real or fake

then

they can easily be tricked and

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it.

Hence

, comprehending chaotic advertisements on the internet or being a fan of someone rationally would be the priority in

kids

' education and development.

Moreover

, adolescents tend to participate in parties which might lead them to be a part of the group and socialize with people

easier

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more easily

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.

Nevertheless

, it

accompanies

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with

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hidden risks in the parties which consist of drug abuse, sexual assault and

committing

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other illegal crimes.

For example

, my cousin insisted to join the orientation and registration after school without the supervision of teachers, unfortunately, she was raped by a stranger who just get into the party without permission and until now she has been conquering severe mental issues and did not finish her degree. In conclusion, based on the information mentioned, we can say that

parents

have been doing their best for

kids

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.

However

, some children refuse to not comply which is quite alarming. From my perspective,

although

it is a sophisticated issue, I believe it would be an informed choice for all

kids

to realize how to discriminate a variety of dangers from outside influence with

parents

in order to obtain more life experiences which not only prevent them from unnecessary damage but

also

provide an authentic happy growing development in their life.