Some parents allow their children to travel around the globe during school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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Some parents are happy to let their offspring travel mid-term.

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others are afraid that it will result in the depletion of one's scholastic performance. There can sometimes be drawbacks, but the situation can

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bring out the best in children.

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, it is a perfect opportunity to learn new languages and cultures. Finding a Chinese native speaker could not be easier.

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, it means nobody is there to nag infants or tell them what to do, which is great, even though they may forget one or two little things.

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, not having teachers around is a chance to prove that you can be independent, self-reliant and even deal with difficult situations occasionally.

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, there are definitely demerits of exploring various countries during school time.

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studying and doing homework may be funnier and more diverse, many pupils will end up not attending lots of essential subjects and elective courses, because they will not concentrate, as there is a lot of entertainment surrounding them.

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, if your teachers are not there to remind you, you may forget something important,

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as homework or a science project.

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, without your classmates around you, you need to cope with any academic emergencies yourself. Let's take a difficult topic as an example. If you do not understand it, you need to sort it out yourself.

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, I believe that the drawbacks for students travelling mid-term far outweigh the benefits.

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Some parents allow their children to travel around the globe during school. What are the advantages and disadvantages of it?

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The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy. Do you think a future resource will take oil’s place? Why do you think this?

Some people believe that the society should be based on rules and laws. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people argue that the use of animal in medical research for the benefit of human is acceptable which other caim that it is wrong. Discuss both views and give your opinion.