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Some people think that it s better to impose higher taxes on unhealthy food, while other disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In recent years,
people
 have been leading a hectic lifestyle, which causes a dramatic change in their
food
 consumption.
Due to
 the busy schedule of society, folk always go for a fast and quick meal which will cause much harm to their physical body. Few communities imagine that it is better to impose higher taxes on junk
food
. In my opinion, I strongly disagree with
this
. In
this
 essay, I will explore the reasons for both views and try to draw some conclusions. The first and foremost reason is, Sanctioning high duty on unhealthy
food
 doesn't make any sense in
people
's minds, and
also
, it doesn't stop
people
 from buying it. Because of their busy ,schedule they don't have enough time to think about why
this
 much of a levy is prescribed on these products.
For instance
, in morning times
people
 use to make instant noodles for their breakfast as it is easy and quick. If the government increases the tax on it,
then
 the public may go for another fast
food
 alternative rather than thinking about the negative impacts on our bodies. The best thing that the relevant officers may do is, they can inform the public about unhealthy junk foods and their effects on the human body, they can make an awareness programme in
this
 regard,in ,schools teachers can teach their children about fast
food
 and its disadvantages. These things may make sense to society. To sum it up, increasing the duty of fast
food
 is not a solution
due to
 the busy schedule of
people
's lifestyle. Providing information can make changes to some extent.
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