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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The provided line charts illustrate the percentage of
households
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 using three distinct electrical appliances and the number of weekly
hours
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 spent doing
housework
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, including washing clothes, preparing meals and cleaning, of each household in a country over the course of 99 years starting from 1920.
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, it is discernible from the charts that there was a general upward trend in the percentages of these electrical appliances' users and the amount of time spent handling
housework
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 by
households
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 dropped significantly in the whole period shown. In 1920,
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 there were 30% and 40% of
households
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 owning refrigerators and washing machines, there was no one using vacuum cleaners and every household spent around 50
hours
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 weekly on average doing
housework
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. In the following 40 years, the proportions of
households
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 owning each of these tools increased drastically and they only had to spend just about 20
hours
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 a week for their
housework
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 in 1960. During
this
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 period, vacuum cleaners became the most popular appliance among the three studied ones with 90% of
households
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 using them
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 the figures for refrigerators and washing machines both stood at 70%. From 1960 onwards,
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 the percentages of
households
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 using washing machines and vacuum cleaners continued to rise and finished at 100% in the final year, the figure for refrigerators fluctuated before finishing at approximately 74% in 2019. Meanwhile,
households
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 spent a lesser amount of time every week handling their
housework
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 over the years. In 2019, each household only spent just around 11
hours
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 per week on these tasks.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words households, hours, housework with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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