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The spread of a ‘global language’ such as English will threaten national languages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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English
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 is now used by the majority of countries in the world in their daily conversation. Having taken other solutions into consideration, I agree that international languages could impact local languages.
Firstly
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, the internet invention is one of the reasons behind, much information can easily be accessed and is mostly in
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.
Therefore
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,
English
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 become an important
language
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 skill to have and parents have encouraged their children to expert
this
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 since in golden age. By teaching children from a young age, making them more fluent in
English
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 and giving them a competitive advantage in the future.
However
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, some problems may occur, taking the extinction of the local
language
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 as an example. Many schools in Indonesia currently deliver courses in
English
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 and they abolished a local
language
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such
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 as Sundanese from the curriculum.
Secondly
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, the government does not prioritize local
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 as an intangible asset of a country and makes little effort to protect it.
As a result
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, many young generations are not aware of their origin
as well as
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 their ancestors' culture and are more familiar with Western culture. One of the actions that may help the existence of a national
language
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 is using it every day as their daily communication.
Nevertheless
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, many people in big cities prefer to enrol their kids on International Schools, which is
English
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 as their main
language
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 every day. To illustrate, in Jakarta, many International Schools were built and all the modules were learned in
English
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.
Consequently
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, many student graduates from
this
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 school can not speak the Indonesian
language
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 very well. In conclusion, using
English
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 as their main
language
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also
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 could lead to the extinction of the national
language
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.
Therefore
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, I remain firmly convinced that I agree that global
language
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 could endanger the national
language
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.

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Structure
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Coherence
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Relevance
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Lexical Range
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Development
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Examples
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Task Response
It's important to fully address the task by providing a clear opinion and discussing both sides of the argument when required. In this essay, make sure to reflect on and counterbalance the impacts of English as a global language.
Grammar
Check your essay for any grammatical errors or awkward phrasing. Aim to write in accurate and natural-sounding English.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • lingua franca
  • international communication
  • erode
  • linguistic diversity
  • transmitted
  • cultural identity
  • heritage
  • diluted
  • dominant
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language policies
  • real-time translation
  • technological advancements
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