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Details of politicians private lives should not be published in newspaper. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#politicians #lives #newspaper
It is widely believed that
politicians
 private lives should not be published in newspaper or internet. Personally i completely agree with
this
 viewpoint for variety of reasons. First of all, is it obvious that the viewer is interest in
politicians
 private lives.
This
 means that there will be a lot of journalists or paparazzi will invade privacy to get the information of
politicians
. Being interrupted by paparazi or journalists will create more stress for them,
besides
, their jobs include a lot of pressure,
this
 may resulting them in serious health problems,
such
 as anxiety, mental health or even heart attack. One of the example is: a member of Vietnam state government suffered from depression after his private
life
 was exposed by the media. Futhermore, not all journalists do genuine and proper business.
This
 means that to make money, they will use all the tricks include make fake stories of the
politicians
life
 or distort the truth of the
politicians
life
,
this
 will affect the image that they have built, make the citizen lose sympathy for the
politicians
.
For instance
: The Vnexpress, one of the most famous news in Vietnam have given a figure that over 40% of member from government being told wrong by the press, which affecting their careers, even losing their jobs. In conclusion, i believe that
politicians
life
 should be kept private, to keep
politicians
life
 safe from being leak out
as well as
 image protection.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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