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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured in other ways. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, could be difficult to quantify
the
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people
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intelligence
.
While
 some individuals believe that
success
 is the main result of
intelligence
, others argue that there are more effective methods to evaluate it. In my view,
intelligence
 can be measured through various means beyond
success
 and in
this
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 I will try to explain my point of view. Some
people
 achieve
success
 in terms of relationships with successful
people
, others reach their top peak of
success
 because of personal skills and abilities. Undoubtedly,
success
 can be
indicator
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an indicator
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 of
intelligence
, but is not always a reliable measure. There are individuals born into affluent families, who may be able to achieve
success
 through their wealth and connections rather than their
intelligence
.
Nevertheless
,
this
 is not enough to have good connections to be
successful
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 person.
On the other hand
, there are numerous
people
 who do not have the same advantages but possess immense
intelligence
that is
 not reflected in their achievements.
This
 is because brilliant
people
 are better able to overcome all obstacles on their way to
success
 or adapt to new situations and environments, despite having no academic qualifications or
have
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 limited financial resources. Steve Jobs, Apple’s famed co-founder, is a case in point. He becomes phenomenally successful, despite dropping out of college. Hard work and determination play important roles in
such
success
 stories.
Moreover
, a person’s
intelligence
 can
also
 be reflected in their ability to empathize with others, understand their perspectives, and communicate effectively with them. In conclusion,
while
success
 may be an indicator of
intelligent
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 it is not the only measure.
Intelligence
 can be measured in various ways beyond achievement, problem-solving skills, adaptability, and interpersonal abilities.
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