Music is played in every society and culture in the world today. Some people think that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however, think that music can have a negative influence on both. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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to music
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individuals and societies ? In
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music
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is crucial around the culture and must be
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anywhere like;
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,
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and weddings.
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, the songs are irreplaceable because it is
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of speech art that has multiple types that make it unique.
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, in all
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of
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year or religious
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the singers download new albums.
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all patients
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suffering from anxiety and
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are
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this
way to reduce these symptoms. Another point to consider,
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public concert and recent songs that release by famous
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the governments because
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responsible for
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. It is
also
possible to say that, the societies will spend a lot of money and effort
instead
of
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this
money for locals.
Moreover
, some families and
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teenagers
travel to another city to attend to their best singer and live there work and responsibilities.
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, the study that
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in 2012 in New York
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found that most students who wear
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and listen have less
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than other
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children
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. In conclusion, despite people having different types of
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views
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, I believe that music
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is
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beneficial way to change mode but we should
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much use to solve our congenital bruin ability.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harmony
  • Melody
  • Rhythm
  • Socio-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cognitive development
  • Soundtrack
  • Moral implications
  • Acoustic ecology
  • Intellectual property
  • Authenticity
  • Commercialization
  • Media literacy
  • Sensory overload
  • Acculturation
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