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Tell us what has inspired you to become a teacher and tell us why you think teaching is a good career choice for you.

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My motivation to become a teacher has grown significantly since I met a dedicated and ambitious teacher named Mr. Kawaguchi at high
school
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, who taught me what is important in life. As he took
students
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 to various places to explore the world themselves, he encouraged his
students
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 to be wild and adventurous so they could have stimulating learning experiences.
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, he sometimes
let
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 us conduct a community survey to analyze local problems and other times take a tour of a city to find its cultural features, all of which they could not have learned at
school
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.
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 practical opportunities not only led to an intimate relationship between
students
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 and local residents but
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 to their growing
curiosities
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curiosity
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 toward the world, increasing their motivation to learn throughout their life. Since
then
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, I have believed that education is essential for the progress of individuals and society and is what people need the most to solve complicated problems in
this
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 fast-changing world. Teaching is a good career choice for me because I am patient and able to make a steady commitment to a task. Indeed, no matter how difficult it seems to achieve a goal at
first,
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I am able to make a gradual effort, without losing hope for improvement. To illustrate
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, even when my class was disorganized in the beginning as some
students
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 acted violently
while
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 others were frequently absent from
school
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, I kept stressing the importance of morality and hard work throughout the whole period of time.
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, I sometimes spent hours consulting with
students
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 to encourage them to reflect on their own
behaviors
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behaviours
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 so as not to repeat the same mistakes.
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 of dealing with various challenges at
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, I am better able to gain
trust
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from
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students
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, promoting their responsible and independent acts.

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Conclusion Advice
To enhance your essay further, ensure that your conclusion is more explicitly linked back to your introduction, summarizing the points made and reinforcing your main message.
Example Advice
While the examples provided are specific and relevant, consider exploring more diverse experiences or perspectives that lead to your decision to become a teacher.
Task Response Highlight
You successfully provide a complete and thoughtful response to the task by explaining what inspired you to become a teacher and why teaching is a fitting career choice for you.
Coherence and Cohesion Highlight
The essay is well-organized with a logical flow, making it easy for the reader to follow your thoughts from one point to the next.
Support Highlight
You use engaging and relevant examples to support your main points, such as your experiences with a motivating teacher and personal commitment to patience and diligence in teaching.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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