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It is observed that people these day spend large sum of money on clothes, hair care and other beauty products. some people see it as a necessary expenditure whereas others see it as a wastage of money. Do you agree or disagree?

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As it is enunciated by a proportion, wealth allocation on
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 can be justified under numerous circumstances,
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 others hold contradictory
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 it is not sensible to spend an unbearable amount on
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. Albeit, there is a dichotomy of
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 apprehension is totally warranted but, it should beg for some sort of profound justifications and conspicuous exemplifications.
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, It is not a heresy to assume that,
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 triggers always highly polarized
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, A section of society harbours the belief that, maintaining
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 with great expenditure is an apocalyptic demon devouring financial resources to maintain
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, even though
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utopian exaggeration and perfectibility, undermining human ultimate values with goodness, truth and justice in front of mundane values
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 as
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 and prioritizing maintaining
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 disregarding in the importance of financial stability, health, nutrition and educational progress
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 the lack of money on these areas. For others, but, in my ,perspective it would tend to result in biased interpretation, since,
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 is the one of ultimate progress in a liberal society and promises unimaginable personal and social growth. No doubt to say, great expenditure on
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 is thoroughly embedded with Neo professionalism, a sense of prestige, status and first impression those values are deeply enshrined in liberal culture.
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, personal
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 is the epitome of posh and popular culture, so maintaining
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 even with high expenditure patterns is a rational and coherent approach.
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, any individual, regardless of their biased
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 issue, would be able to respect my idea and attitude by examining the rudimentary conundrum and other alternative preponderant results.
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