The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999).

The bar chart below shows the number of employees from the European Union in the United States (1999).
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The bar graph illustrates how many
number of
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apply
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workers from seven
category
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categories
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of employment namely: education training,
hotel
industry, medical, building,
business
self-employed and unemployed from the European Union the US
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the highest employment category was
business
and the least was
hotel
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the hotel
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industry in the initial year.
Also
, in the second year,
self employed
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self-employed
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was more popular among the adult population
whereas
unemployed was least popular among them. In 2003,
majority
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the majority
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of the
matured
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population chose to do
business
with just over 45 which the respondents decided to do. The second field of choice was medical with 20. Unemployed and self-employed were relatively the same at 10 as compared to education training at 5 with the least being
hotel
industry. In 2003, more people chose to be self-employed at approximately 30, followed by
business
at around 25. Building,
hotel
and education training we're almost equal. Unemployed was the least chosen with 5 as compared with medical at around 10.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words hotel, business with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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