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Most of the urgent problems can only be solved with international cooperation.  To what extent do you agree or disagree？

#cooperation #disagree？
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The debate over whether international
cooperation
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 is an effective means of solving urgent
problems
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 has been long-standing.
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 some argue that global forces are the only solution to a wide range of challenges, I would contend that it depends on the issue at hand. As
this
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 urgent
problem
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 is relevant to the
country
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 itself,solving
this
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problem
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 through domestic
cooperation
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 is a better choice.As we know,some bad social phenomena are caused by domestic
problems
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.In
this
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 situation,internal people prefer to solve these
problems
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 by themselves.
For instance
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,if a
country
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's rate of crime keeps increasing in recent years,domestic people will require the government to make some crucial laws in relevant areas.When the government
asked
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 for international help,
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 as in some violent ways,people may be unsatisfied with the government.
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,as the urgent
problem
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 is relevant to the international
country
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,it can be solved well with international
cooperation
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.Because of the complexity of the
problem
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,a good solution of it usually involves several countries.In some countries,the
problems
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 of drugs are really serious,leading to many social crimes,but it is difficult for the
country
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 itself to protect its citizens from being hurt.The drug may be produced in another
country
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,and domestic law is useless for the producer.At that time,if these countries can make some international
cooperation
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,the source of the drug will be destroyed. In conclusion, I believe that the need for international
cooperation
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 to solve urgent
problems
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 depends on the specifics of the issue.In some cases,
such
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 as drugs, international
cooperation
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 is the only way to solve
problems
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.
However
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, in other cases,
such
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 as the rate of crime, local efforts can be more effective.
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The essay provides a clear and comprehensive understanding of the topic, addressing both sides of the argument. The examples are relevant and support the main points effectively.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is well-maintained, with a clear introduction and conclusion. However, more explicit linking devices and signposting language could be used to improve coherence and cohesion further.

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