Fewer young people choose to work in farming. What are the reasons? Should young people be encouraged to do farming work?
At present, the question of why fewer farms for their livelihoods in the countryside remains a conundrum. I will give my own points about the causes of
this
trend and whether it is good for youngsters to work in farming.
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Firstly
, fewer Linking Words
people
do farming jobs in rural areas because those involved are usually underpaid. Use synonyms
Consequently
, it becomes a real hurdle to lead their family to a happy life Linking Words
while
living a low standard. Everyone desires to have tasty meals, to live in gorgeous houses, to send their kid to well-reputed schools so they would never accept Linking Words
such
a low wage . Linking Words
Secondly
, extreme working conditions are another burden that Linking Words
people
have to take on. Use synonyms
For example
, when it is in the middle of June, Linking Words
farmers
are still in the fields on a daily basis Use synonyms
although
the weather is rainy which is detrimental to endure. Linking Words
In contrast
, even an office worker can get a higher air-conditioned working complex. Linking Words
In other words
, Linking Words
this
profession is the Linking Words
last
choice and Linking Words
people
avoid it because making a living seems to be impossible.
Those above-mentioned pieces of evidence show that there are a lot more well-paid careers for Use synonyms
people
to choose if they leave the remote area to study in the city. Use synonyms
Such
as doctors, architecture designers, and other rewarding roles, so I strongly disagree Linking Words
to let
youngsters work in the profession of cultivating. Change preposition
with letting
Moreover
, if students become Linking Words
farmers
, they will waste all the time and money that they Use synonyms
spent
on academic education because watering and collecting do not need Wrong verb form
spend
high
level of qualification but health, all of their accomplishments at school are unusable Add an article
a high
then
. Linking Words
For instance
, unlike Linking Words
farmers
, well-educated IT developers can earn much more in a month. Use synonyms
In addition
, those Linking Words
people
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also
have the right to experience other perks Linking Words
such
as being flexible in working schedules, which Linking Words
farmers
could never have .
In conclusion, there are a few key reasons for the decreasingly attendance to the work that provides agriculture products being Use synonyms
little
amount of pay and a poor working environment. Correct word choice
low
Due to
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this
, the young should consider having another choice which is more try-worthy with more creature comforts.Linking Words
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