Fewer young people choose to work in farming. What are the reasons? Should young people be encouraged to do farming work?

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At present, the question of why fewer farms for their livelihoods in the countryside remains a conundrum. I will give my own points about the causes of
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trend and whether it is good for youngsters to work in farming.
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, fewer
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do farming jobs in rural areas because those involved are usually underpaid.
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, it becomes a real hurdle to lead their family to a happy life
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living a low standard. Everyone desires to have tasty meals, to live in gorgeous houses, to send their kid to well-reputed schools so they would never accept
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a low wage .
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, extreme working conditions are another burden that
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have to take on.
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, when it is in the middle of June,
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are still in the fields on a daily basis
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the weather is rainy which is detrimental to endure.
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, even an office worker can get a higher air-conditioned working complex.
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,
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profession is the
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choice and
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avoid it because making a living seems to be impossible. Those above-mentioned pieces of evidence show that there are a lot more well-paid careers for
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to choose if they leave the remote area to study in the city.
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as doctors, architecture designers, and other rewarding roles, so I strongly disagree
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youngsters work in the profession of cultivating.
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, if students become
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, they will waste all the time and money that they
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on academic education because watering and collecting do not need
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level of qualification but health, all of their accomplishments at school are unusable
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.
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, unlike
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, well-educated IT developers can earn much more in a month.
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, those
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also
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have the right to experience other perks
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as being flexible in working schedules, which
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could never have . In conclusion, there are a few key reasons for the decreasingly attendance to the work that provides agriculture products being
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amount of pay and a poor working environment.
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, the young should consider having another choice which is more try-worthy with more creature comforts.
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