Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals opine that the most crucial environmental crisis is that some
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of
animals
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are on the verge of extinction.
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others believe that there are other prominent dangers
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threatening
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the environment. In
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essay, I intend to analyze both views.
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, I agree with the first notion. On the one hand, the proponent of
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view
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that
animals
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are part of the ecosystem which have consisted major section of the environment. So,
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existence can directly affect
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other species
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and balance the life of creatures like plants and
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micro-organisms
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. Because it is like a chain and all are
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on each other.
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, if some species of mouth die out it is likely that other
animals
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which are
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from
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exposing on the verge of extinction and others that are used to being hunted by that mouth may spread and that would be problematic when it comes to
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larger scales.
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, the opponents may claim that until we suffer
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climate
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and over-pollution, we cannot prioritize other
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problems
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.
this
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issue not only leads to
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the vita of
animals
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and plants
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but
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can destroy
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human's
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life.
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, the consequences of
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issue is more close to us
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to the
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animals
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existence.
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, researchers have estimated that the longevity of
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earth
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is only 100 years after us if we continue
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this
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procedure.
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,
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the problem is solvable but the time is confined.
to sum up
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, I reiterate that
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no one cannot underestimate the issue of animal extinction
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, there are
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other matters that must take into the account precedence of
animal
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subject
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • extinction
  • habitat loss
  • ecosystem
  • food chain
  • imbalance
  • interconnected
  • climate change
  • pollution
  • personal actions
  • policy changes
  • education
  • awareness
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