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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Making children realize what is good and bad in their early lives is a vital ingredient in parenthood.
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 is considered an acceptable approach to teaching them.
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 I agree with
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 viewpoint, I
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 believe that inclining solely toward
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 has negative ramifications Bringing up future generations has always been a difficult task for
parents
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, simply because it requires sleepless nights and strong dedication. Teach something to children from an early pace in their lives is important, and some
parents
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 choose
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 in doing
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 That's because, when a
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 decides to commit something
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 out of casual human behaviour, they immediately refrain from doing it, considering its physical or mental consequences.
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, where there are limitations and barriers, there often discipline occurs. That means, children are determined enough to do serious actions about their future lives by being disciplined
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 of any kind,
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, be it physical or mental, has an adverse impact on
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 development. Take, physical
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, for ,example which not only exerts influence on the health of a
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, but
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 constant exposure to
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 makes a
child
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 even more stubborn, which means they become more vulnerable to do restraint actions.
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,
parents
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 should opt for a friendly way where they teach them moral thoughts or attempt to set a role model. In
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 way, the
child
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 will easily learn the difference between right and wrong.
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, it is true that
punishment
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 should be used in some cases when bringing up a
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, I believe, that
parents
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' selection should not be only physical or mental retribution to the
child
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, making them suffer severely
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