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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by there and come in 2007, 2011 And 2015

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by there and come in 2007, 2011 And 2015
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The bar chart illustrates the proportion of US
households
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household's
households'
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income
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 in 2007,2011 and 2015. During 2007, the highest
income
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 was 100,000
dollar
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dollars
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 or more .
on the other hand
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, the lowest
income
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 was
in
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apply
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between 75,000-99,999 $. In comparison, the annual
income
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 of households in 2011 shows that the salary holder for 100,000 or more decreased than
2007
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in 2007
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.
Moreover
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, the highest
income
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 was 255,000 to 49,999
dollar
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dollars
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 in 2011. As observed, the chart
show
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shows
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 that in 2015 the household’s
income
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 was the highest than
other
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in other
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 years, which was 100 thousand
dollar
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dollars
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 or more. Closely, the
people
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number of people
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 who make less than 25,000 $ was high. In conclusion, salary is based on several elements like age, education,
profession
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and profession
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. Because of that, it’s expected
the
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that
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 diversity between the range of
the
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apply
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income
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 during each year,
therefore
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 the differences
was
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were
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 various between the years
of
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apply
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2007, 2011and 2015.

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • income distribution
  • household income
  • income brackets
  • annual income
  • economic factors
  • employment rates
  • policy changes
  • proportion of households
  • lower income bracket
  • middle income bracket
  • higher income bracket
  • inflation
  • cost of living
  • trend analysis
  • significant increase/decrease
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