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The chart and table below show the average number of children born to one woman and the average age of women when they had their first child in two countries between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below show the average number of children born to one woman and the average age of women when they had their first child in two countries between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates how many
children
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 women had on average in the
UK
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 and
Kazakhstan
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 from 1920 to 2019,
while
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 the table provides a woman’s average
age
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 of first-time motherhood for the same
countries
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 and time period. Over time, a general trend of deferring childbearing to a later
age
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 and having fewer
children
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overall
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 can be observed in both
countries
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,
although
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 women in
Kazakhstan
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 had their first child earlier and had more
children
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 than their
UK
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 counterparts. In 1920, the average British woman gave birth to approximately two
children
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,
while
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 the Kazakhstani average was around 3.5. In both
countries
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, the birth rate continued to increase until the 1960s, at which point it peaked at around 2.7 and 4.5
children
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 per woman respectively. Between 1960 and 2019, the numbers generally declined, with the end of the period displaying a rate of approximately 1.8
children
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 per woman in the
UK
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 and 3.0 in
Kazakhstan
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. In terms of women’s
age
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 at first childbirth, females in
Kazakhstan
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 preceded those in Britain by about one to four years across all time periods. The average
age
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 of giving birth to the first child increased slightly in both
countries
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, from 26.5 in the
UK
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 and 23.5 in
Kazakhstan
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 in 1920 to 28.9 and 27.6 in 2019 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, uk, kazakhstan, age, countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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