Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Listening to

music

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has always been the most popular and

favorite

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hobby of

people

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date

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extremely less number of

people

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might not like listening to

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, other than them, the

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that find it interesting believe that it could be one way to bring

people

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together from vast cultures and centuries. In my opinion,

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is totally correct and, in

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essay, I will explain the reasons why and how it brings us all together.

To begin

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with, we know there are over thousands

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of various

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languages in the world.

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majority

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people

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only understand a few of them.

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, listening to

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in any language they don’t understand will be okay for them.

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is because

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has a fantasy. It has the power to rejuvenate an individual soul and make them feel for the instruments being played in the

music

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, the famous song called “Despacito” was sung in French, and it got attention from all over the world. After a survey, it was found that

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of its viewers do not even understand

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language and they would listen to it because their inner selves could feel it.

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, it is noticed

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made in the early century

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popular even nowadays. It brings curiosity in

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to know when and who

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this

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song and to know about its cultural background and find about that time and know the grounds, why

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song was sung. In

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way,

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music

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the music

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industry never dies and

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instead

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keep

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keeps

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the

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apply

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people

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alive and connected to their loved

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ones

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, Sidhu Moosewala, a popular singer that died in an accident is still alive in citizens’ heart and every time someone

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to his

music

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remembers him.

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, in

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I will say that

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we should not listen to

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for the sake of listening.

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, we should tend to understand

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apply

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it and learn about it. We should investigate the purpose behind it and in

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way

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we will be able to get closer to other

people

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and traditions.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

342 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
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diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
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