Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Listening to
music
has always been the most popular and
favorite
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hobby of
people
.
Till
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date
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extremely less number of
people
might not like listening to
music
.
However
, other than them, the
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ones
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that find it interesting believe that it could be one way to bring
people
together from vast cultures and centuries. In my opinion,
this
is totally correct and, in
this
essay, I will explain the reasons why and how it brings us all together.
To begin
with, we know there are over thousands
various
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languages in the world.
Although
,
majority
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of
people
only understand a few of them.
Nevertheless
, listening to
music
in any language they don’t understand will be okay for them.
This
is because
music
has a fantasy. It has the power to rejuvenate an individual soul and make them feel for the instruments being played in the
music
.
For instance
, the famous song called “Despacito” was sung in French, and it got attention from all over the world. After a survey, it was found that
majority
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of its viewers do not even understand
it’s
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its
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language and they would listen to it because their inner selves could feel it.
Furthermore
, it is noticed
music
made in the early century
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is
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popular even nowadays. It brings curiosity in
people
to know when and who
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this
song and to know about its cultural background and find about that time and know the grounds, why
this
song was sung. In
this
way,
music
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industry never dies and
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keep
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keeps
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the
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people
alive and connected to their loved
ones’
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ones
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.
For example
, Sidhu Moosewala, a popular singer that died in an accident is still alive in citizens’ heart and every time someone
listen
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to his
music
remembers him.
Lastly
, in
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I will say that
,
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apply
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we should not listen to
music
for the sake of listening.
Instead
, we should tend to understand
to
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apply
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it and learn about it. We should investigate the purpose behind it and in
this
way
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we will be able to get closer to other
people
and traditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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