Task 2 In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays,
children
want everything to be comes
true. Change the verb form
come
Moreover
, they don't
like to wait until the thing comes to them, in this
world
it's not that easy to get something we want. Add a comma
,world
Children
or everyone must try hard to arrive to
Change preposition
at
there
dreams. But, it has certain drawbacks too. Replace the word
their
However
, this
essay will examine the advantage and disadvantages of children
can own anything what
they want if they are trying hard.
The two main advantages of Change the word
that
children
owning things if they try hard. Firstly
, feeling happy what
they did to get the thing and Change preposition
about what
secondly
, it helps in future when child
Correct article usage
the child
grow
up so he or she can control him/Change the verb form
grows
her self
with no helps from Correct your spelling
herself
the
others. Correct article usage
apply
For example
, my small brother saved up money for approximately 2 years to buy his dream doll. After that, he didn't
believe what he did. Finally
, thats
show how life is going and how things Correct your spelling
that
is
hard to have it.
Change the verb form
are
However
, achieve
everything might have Wrong verb form
achieving
few
disadvantages. what I mean Correct article usage
a few
children
that could move because of paralysis and Add a missing verb
is children
children
that living
in a weak or poor region Wrong verb form
live
they
absolutely couldn'Correct pronoun usage
apply
t
do anything to have things
they want it. Correct article usage
the things
For instance
, my small cousin he
lives in Correct pronoun usage
apply
small
poor country and he can'Add an article
a small
t
move his legs because of the
bike accident. Correct article usage
a
Consequently
, it's difficult for my cousin to own what ever
he Correct your spelling
whatever
want
.
Change the verb form
wants
To conclude
, achieving everything it
might have a few effects and disadvantages. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Besides
, there are more nice advantages to own
everything by Wrong verb form
owning
try
hard enough.Change the form of the verb
trying
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