Task 2 In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

Nowadays,
children
want everything to
be comes
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true.
Moreover
, they don'
t
like to wait until the thing comes to them, in
this
world
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,world
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it's not that easy to get something we want.
Children
or everyone must try hard to arrive
to
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at
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there
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dreams. But, it has certain drawbacks too.
However
,
this
essay will examine the advantage and disadvantages of
children
can own anything
what
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they want if they are trying hard. The two main advantages of
children
owning things if they try hard.
Firstly
, feeling happy
what
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about what
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they did to get the thing and
secondly
, it helps in future when
child
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the child
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grow
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up so he or she can control him/
her self
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herself
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with no helps from
the
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others.
For example
, my small brother saved up money for approximately 2 years to buy his dream doll. After that, he didn'
t
believe what he did.
Finally
,
thats
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that
show how life is going and how things
is
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are
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hard to have it.
However
,
achieve
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everything might have
few
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a few
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disadvantages. what I mean
children
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is children
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that could move because of paralysis and
children
that
living
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live
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in a weak or poor region
they
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apply
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absolutely couldn'
t
do anything to have
things
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the things
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they want it.
For instance
, my small cousin
he
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apply
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lives in
small
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a small
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poor country and he can'
t
move his legs because of
the
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a
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bike accident.
Consequently
, it's difficult for my cousin to own
what ever
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whatever
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he
want
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wants
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.
To conclude
, achieving everything
it
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apply
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might have a few effects and disadvantages.
Besides
, there are more nice advantages to
own
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owning
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everything by
try
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trying
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hard enough.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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