The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for it is development.
These two maps illustrate the town
centre
of Islip’s present and future map with planned improvements.
From a cursory glance, it is readily apparent that this
town is becoming more industrial with additional buildings and roads. Looking from an overall
percpective
, rode structure will change.
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perspective
Firstly
, Islip has many housing areas in
the South side of the map. Change preposition
on
In addition
, park
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a park
the park
located
on Add a missing verb
is located
Correct article usage
the eastside
eastside
and Correct your spelling
east side
school
is located Correct article usage
the school
westside
of these structures. Correct your spelling
west side
Also
, 16 shops are placed next t oto
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to
main
road. Correct article usage
the main
This
road are
helping to connect school and link.
In the future, they planning to change roads Change the verb form
is
as
dual Change preposition
to
carriageway
and Fix the agreement mistake
carriageways
also
it will be all around of
the city. Meanwhile, some new housing and shopping Change preposition
apply
centre
, bus Fix the agreement mistake
centres
station
and car park areas will replace on Fix the agreement mistake
stations
north
side of the city Add an article
the north
centre
. Additionaly
, these new developments will Correct your spelling
Additionally
Add a missing verb
be separete
separete
with a pedestrian path and shops. Correct your spelling
separate
It is clear that
the size of the park will decrease and some of the housing will stay outside of the city centre
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