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Some people believe that unpaid community activity service should be a compulsory part of high school programs (for example, working for a charity, improving the neighbourhood, or teaching sports to younger children). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some hold the opinion that participating in
community
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service
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, including charitable
activities
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 or educating younger children, without receiving any wage should be a mandatory program in upper secondary education. I partially agree with
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 idea since, on the one side,
compulsion
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 can serve as a forcing factor that leads
students
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 towards being engaged in
activities
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 benefiting their
community
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.
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, on the other side, coercing
students
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 into doing unpaid
community
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service
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 may foster a sense of resentment in them. On the one hand, some advocate the idea of making unpaid
community
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service
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 a compulsory program for high
school
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students
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. They argue that some individuals do not participate in
activities
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 which do not have direct benefits for them,
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, from a financial aspect, unless they are forced into doing them.
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, they believe
compulsion
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 is a necessary element that leads
students
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 towards benefiting their
society
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 by participating in
community
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service
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, even if they are reluctant to do so. They think that whether
students
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' reasons for refusing to perform unpaid
community
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service
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 are justifiable,
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 as time constraints, or unjustifiable,
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 as idleness or feeling irresponsible towards the
community
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, they need to be under pressure from the
school
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 to fulfil their fair share of civic duties towards their
community
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.
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, others oppose the opinion that high
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students
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' engagement in
community
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service
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 should be mandatory. They believe when
students
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, especially adolescents, are coerced into taking part in unpaid
activities
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 to serve their
community
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, they may feel that they are subjected to unfair demands, leading them to feel reluctance or even resentment toward these
activities
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 in the long term.
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,
students
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 are more likely to make their best efforts in performing
community
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service
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 or
activities
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 in the interest of
society
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 if they are allowed to do them out of their own desire or free will
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 of
compulsion
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.
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, by forcing them to participate in benevolent
activities
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 for
society
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 or
community
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service
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,
students
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 may render
service
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 superficially with the least acceptable quality. In conclusion, to some extent, I do agree with the idea suggesting that high
school
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students
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 should be compelled to participate in
community
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service
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activities
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 since
compulsion
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 can serve as a factor that increases
students
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' engagement in
activities
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 benefiting their
society
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, even if some of them are not willing to do so.
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, coercing
students
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 to perform benevolent
activities
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 for the public may create a sense of resentment in them, and they may not put their best efforts into doing
community
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service
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 if it is against their desire or will.
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