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Governments should spend on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #railways #roads
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Instead
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 of funding roads, governments should invest in railroads. I completely agree because
this
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 is a good decision for the public. In my, opinion there are two reasons.
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, railways can carry a large number of passengers. They are an environment-friendly means of transport. It is travel is much more comfortable which is preferred by the customer. There are no traffic jams that can be seen on the road,
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 passengers do not waste any
time
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. They can go to the office, school, and other places on
time
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.
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, for rail, fuel consumption is very high but they can carry a lot of commuters at a
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,
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 is a cost-effective activity for the government. For which it is more affordable for transportation.
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, Buses do not come at the proper
time
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. So, people crowded on the road. But trains always arrive at the right place at the usual
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. There is no gathering at the station. People can reach their destination quickly. The amount of noise pollution caused by buses and cars on the roads is not present at railway stations.
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, in
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 modern era, every person wants to try to go to the office by car and sometimes public bus transportation
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 reason they are fallen in a traffic jam and they can not be reached in just
time
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 as well.
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,
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 is a useful investment in the railways
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 the government takes action.
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 very quiet environment than the roads and the people like it.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph focuses on one main idea to maintain clarity and strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
For even stronger coherence, make use of a wider range of linking devices between and within paragraphs.
task achievement
In addressing the essay prompt, directly stating your opinion in the introduction strengthens the overall clarity of your stance.
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When providing examples, ensure they are specific and clearly linked to the point being discussed for maximum impact.
task achievement
Your introduction effectively sets up the topic and your stance on it, providing a clear roadmap for your essay.
coherence cohesion
Your essay logically progresses from the significance of railway investment, its benefits over road transport, to a strong conclusion, showcasing excellent logical structure.
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You've chosen relevant examples and comparisons to support your points, which effectively illustrate your arguments.
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