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Advances in technology have had a profound impact on society. Discuss the positive and negative effects of technology on individuals and communities. Provide relevant examples and your own opinion

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With the merge of globalisation, there have been new technological discoveries, which changed, in a remarkable way, the
world
 we knew. Even if, some
people
 state that these innovations,
such
 as AI, could harm
people
's thinking, I still have an optimistic view regarding them. Technologies have a greater impact that can be used to bring
people
 together. Since smartphones, computers and other gadgets were created,
people
 started to rely more and more on them.
This
 is seen, by most, as a negative effect of
this
 new era, because when you depend too much on your phone it may be difficult to either think or take action without it. In fact, everywhere we go, we have our smartphone with us and
this
 dependence has grown with the creation of AI (artificial intelligence), the most popular AI tool today is ChatGpt. First of all, it is free so everyone can use it and ask every question they want, about every subject,
as a result
,
people
 stopped thinking with their own minds and they just depend on the answers, without even elaborating on them. At the same time, communities can be harmed too by using
this
 server,
for instance
, in schools, where students ask specific prompts to cheat on a test or to write an essay without any effort.
Consequently
, a lot of regulations were implemented throughout these months to regulate and limitate the use of
such
 projects.
However
, technology had
also
 improved our lives in a lot of ways. One major success was the innovations in communications. After the global
world
, we have seen
people
 becoming more neat to each other
,
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 because we can connect easily. The creation of phones,
as a consequence
, permits
people
 to see each other at the same time, even if they are in different regions. Nowadays, with the internet every person has a phone, so they can make calls, video-call or just chat. Even in the working
world
 is essential, because, through the internet, they maintain political and business relations between countries. In conclusion, an immense transformation in the
world
 was caused by new technologies. Which in a way can settle
people
 into an automation thinking, anyway if used correctly they can improve relations among
people
 and organisations.
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