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People sleep less than they used to in the past. What do you think is the reason behind this? What are the effects on individuals?

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IN THE PRESENT TIME THERE IS MINIMAL SLEEP AMONG
PEOPLE
 COMPARED TO THAT OF IN THE PREVIOUS TIMES.
THIS
 IS
DUE TO
 THE INCREASE IN VARIOUS DISTRACTIONS AND CHANGES IN LIFESTYLE WHICH MAJORLY IMPACT THE HEALTH OF THE
PEOPLE
 OVER TIME. IN THE PREVIOUS TIMES THERE WERE LESS SOURCES OF DEVIATIONS AND that’s why
PEOPLE
 LED A HEALTHY LIFE. NOWADAYS,
PEOPLE
 ARE HAVING LESS SNOOZE TIME MAINLY BECAUSE OF THE EXCESS USAGE OF MOBILE PHONES UNTIL GOING TO the BED. THE BLUE LIGHT EMITTED THROUGH THE DEVICE IS STOPPING US TO SLEEP AS IT SENDS THE WRONG SIGNALS TO THE BRAIN TO BE AWAKE DESPITE THE BODY BEING TIRED AND WANTING SLEEP. THE SUFFICIENT SLEEP OF 8 HOURS IS NOT ACHIEVED WHICH IMPACTS OUR WORK THE NEXT DAY BY REDUCING THE COGNITIVE THINKING AND LESS ABILITY TO FOCUS ON THE TASKS.
FOR EXAMPLE
, WHEN AN AVERAGE HUMAN BEING AFTER HAVING A HECTIC WORK DAY SPENDS LATE AT NIGHT ON SOCIAL MEDIA AND STREAMING PLATFORMS WOULD NOT BE ABLE TO GIVE HIS BEST PRESENTATION AT WORK THE NEXT DAY AND TAKE LOGICAL DECISIONS. public is EXPERIENCING NIGHTMARES DURING THEIR SLEEP BECAUSE OF THE CONSUMPTION OF CONTENT ONLINE THAT DISTURBS THE BRAIN BEFORE GOING TO BED.
THIS
 CAN BE REDUCED BY JOURNALING, DECLUTTERING THE BEDROOM.
DUE TO
 IMPROPER AND LATE-NIGHT EATING HABITS MANY COMPLAIN OF INDIGESTION WHICH
ALSO
 SOMETIMES LEADS TO SEVERE HEALTH CONDITIONS. IN CONCLUSION, IMPROPER DIET, ADDICTION TO THE SMARTPHONES AND VARIOUS HABITS AFFECT THE
OVERALL
 WELL-BEING OF
PEOPLE
DUE TO
 THE THOSE IMPACTS ON SLEEP. AS IN THE ,PAST A PERSON SHOULD HAVE LESS ACCESS TO DEVICES BEFORE SLEEP AND IN GENERAL.
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