The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.
This
graph illustrates Tourist orders information
in one country for 6 months in 2011.As it
clear from the graph Correct your spelling
is
that
the Correct pronoun usage
apply
information
were
received in Unnecessary verb
apply
person
had increased significantly in
January from nearly 401 to be
1900 in June.
Unnecessary verb
apply
In
Add a hyphen
In-person
person
Add a comma
,person
information
were
Change the verb form
was
the
less amount in January Correct article usage
apply
comparing
with the Wrong verb form
compared
information
by letters
and in person
. But then
,there was highly increasing
in June.Replace the word
increase
Although
, in the half of February the information
had gradually the same with information
by letters
.
Orders by letters
,remain the same amount in January and February between 600 to 800. But in March the figure had stick
to 700 until it had fallen significantly to reach less than 400 in May.
Requests by telephone had Change the verb form
stuck
level
up despite Wrong verb form
levelled
information
by letters
and in person
. However
,it seems there is still same
request number of Correct article usage
the same
information
in
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at
beginning
of April with the Add an article
the beginning
information
in person
to reach one thousand.
To sum up
, the request number by letters
were
generally the only one were decreased in June.Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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Vocabulary: Replace the words information, person, letters with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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