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The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries. The graph shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
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The line graph illustrates the data of the
population
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proportion
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 of over 65
years
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 old citizens in
Japan
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,
Sweden
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, and the
USA
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 from 1940 to 2040.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
proportion
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and over in three countries (
Japan
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,
Sweden
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, and the
USA
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) are forecasted to grow significantly in 2040. In 1940, the
USA
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 was the top country for the
proportion
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 of 65+
population
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, it started at nearly 10%.
On the contrary
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, the country with the lowest percentage was faced by
Japan
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 at exactly 5% in the beginning year.
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, after becoming the never tions with the lowest number over 80
years
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,
Japan
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’s elderly
population
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 is forecasted to peak at more than a quarter of the total
population
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 in 2040.
In addition
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, the
USA
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 is predicted to become a country with the lowest 65+ aged
population
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 below
Japan
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 and
Sweden
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 at under 25%.
Furthermore
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,
in
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 the beginning of the period, the
proportion
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 of the
population
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 aged 65 and older in
Sweden
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 stood at more than 5%.
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, After experiencing a constant increase over 40
years
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 by around 5%, it was a slight decline
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between 1980 and 2000 at nearly 15%.
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, in 2040,
Sweden
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’s over 65
years
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 old
population
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proportion
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 is predicted to rise by exactly a quarter, below
Japan
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, proportion, years, japan, sweden, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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