Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

It is often argued that different ages of
people
from various nations can
share
their cultures through
music
. And I fully agree that
music
has
a
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power in gathering various
people
in the world. First of all, I believe that each country can
share
music
contents which
contain
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their own traditions and cultures. These days, we have many global social media including a video platform, Youtube, so it is easier to experience other nations’
music
indirectly.
For example
, a traditional
music
called Jongmyo Jeryeak in Korea, we have videos of how
this
ceremony is held,
however
, we
also
watch
music
videos of Michael Jackson in America. By sharing on the video platform, many countries are able to search for other nations’ traditional
music
and get some information about what songs are trending in different countries.
Secondly
,
music
can make
people
gather between different generations. Briefly, we can
share
music
with our parents’ generation, by making remake songs based on the 1990s.
For instance
, recently, a K-pop singer named Jeon Somi made a song in the Tecktonik genre which trended from the 1990s to the 2000s. And we dance
according to
this
old style genre and
share
it with older
people
than us. We can make a new trend based on the old genre by remaking old songs and
find
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a similar part with other generations. In conclusion, I strongly believe that
music
is a good way to gather
people
of various generations and countries because of experiencing other traditions indirectly and finding the same part between the elderly and the young.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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