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Historical objects should be brought back to their country of origin. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many contend that historical assets should be returned to the country they originated from.
While
 I partially concur with
this
 opinion, it should not be a universal rule. Proponents of the return of these relics point to their historical importance.
This
 can be explained through the hypothetical scenario of Japan discovering a diary written by Ho Chi Minh during his stay there on his journey to seek national salvation. As the Japanese are generally unfamiliar with
this
 historical figure, the diary possesses minimal relevance to them and limited commercial value for local public display institutions. It naturally should be repatriated to Vietnam, where Ho Chi Minh is revered as their greatest leader. Vietnamese historians would gain valuable insights into his revolutionary journey through the diary, and the museum exhibiting it would attract more visitors eager to witness his handwriting and explore the accompanying narratives.
However
, there are
also
 historical objects that do not require repatriation.
For example
, after the Vietnam War, the United States withdrew the majority of its military weaponry, a part of which would already suffice for reutilization for exhibition and other purposes. It is
therefore
 unnecessary to reclaim the American tanks currently on display at the War Remnants Museum in Ho Chi Minh City. These foreign exhibits have long been the essence of the museum, drawing numerous visitors, enabling them to experience the war more authentically, and inspiring them to learn history.
This
,
coupled with
 the substantial costs concerning specialized approaches to transporting
such
 large, rusted vehicles to the United States, justifies their retention in Vietnam. In conclusion,
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 should not be the sole driver of historical
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 repatriation. Other factors,
such
 as delivery expenses and the specific needs and interests of each country involved, should
also
 be taken into account.
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