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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some people think
cities
 are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion Nowadays, large
cities
 are becoming busier.
The
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 great part of the population prefers living in a big town because of the great advantages it has compared to living in the countryside. I totally agree with
this
 statement for the following reasons. First of all, there is a large number of big shops
are
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located in the
city
 which give easy access to everybody to support their daily and extra things.
For example
, stores like supermarkets, banks and clothes
store
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stores
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 are available everywhere so you have to go to the
city
center
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. When you live in the
city
, you can come in contact with many people of great intelligence and understanding. From there, improving yourself, the quality of life is basically better than in the countryside.
Secondly
, most quality schools are located in
cities
.
In addition
to
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, transportation is very convenient,
for example
, there are buses,
taxis
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and taxis
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, grab even tourists,
as well as
 residents, can
also
 freely use
bicycle
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bicycles
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 in
cities
.
Also
, all schools and colleges of league tables are
also
 located in the urban areas. In the
city
, a high opportunity to win grand for education because the government provide more scholarships for top universities. In conclusion, it is a fact that living in a
city
 has a lot of advantages but is important to remember to compare before deciding where you could feel better to live.
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