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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
Thesedays
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These days
, many people are quite concerned about choosing a place
to
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for
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 their own life. Certain like to live in
countryside
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the countryside
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 area,
while
other
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others
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 prefer to live in the
cities
center
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centre
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. In
this
 essay, I will show the advantages and disadvantages of living
cities
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in cities
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 or
countryside
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the countryside
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 and give my opinion in conclusion. Living in
city
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the city
a city
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 is captivated by most of
dwellers
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the dwellers
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. Owing to more employment opportunities as
there
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their
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 multiple industries and
the
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apply
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business were set up headquarter,
cities
 always become
economic
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an economic
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hub
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 in province or country. In
cities
, where infrastructures were developed rapidly, so it
need
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 the various amount of human resources
concomitant
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and concomitant
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 commodities cater to boost residence.
In contrast
,
cost
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the cost
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 of living
are
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is
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 higher than
living
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the living
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 standard
other
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in other
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 areas. Higher cost
due to
 increased demand from a higher population density.
On the other hand
,
living
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the living
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countryside
 will be had better air quality and feel fresh on the grounds that a lot of green spaces and the
obsence
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absence
 of pollutants,
less
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fewer
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 cars and traffics on the road. Contrastly with
cities
, lower
cost
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costs
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mainly
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are mainly
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due to
 sparse population, lower land values and modest salary level. Residence in
countryside
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the countryside
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are
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is
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 unskilled labor and insecure employment. In conclusion, anywhere you live
have
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has
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their
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its
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 own benefits so you can choose a place suitable for your education, career,
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and lifestyles
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lifestyles
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lifestyle
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. In my
invididual
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individual
, I believe that living
cities
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in cities
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 have many advantages
than
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to
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countryside
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the countryside
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.
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