The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
The graph illustrates how many
millions
of visitors
visit a particular Caribbean island
over seven years of periods. (from 2010 to 2017)
Overall
, total number
of tourists visiting a Caribbean island
increased over the years. Visitors
staying on cruise ships also
raised gradually as well as
visitors
staying on island
too. Add an article
the island
However
, number
of total Change the article
a number
the number
visitors
were high and tourists staying on cruise ships and island
were almost similar in Change preposition
on island
number
.
On the one hand, foreigners stayed
on cruise ships were approximately 0.25 Wrong verb form
staying
millions
in 2010. In 2011 it raised by 0.25 Change to singular
million
millions
and reached 0.5 Change to singular
million
millions
. But again in Change to singular
million
2012
it dropped to 0.25 Add a comma
,2012
millions
,after 2013 it started to Change to singular
million
jumped
gradually and land up to 2 Wrong verb form
jump
millions
Change to singular
million
at the end
of year
. Add an article
the year
Visitors
stayed
on Wrong verb form
staying
island
in 2010 were around 0.75 Add an article
the island
an island
millions
and it increased to 1.5 Change to singular
million
millions
in 2013 . From 2013 to 2015 Change to singular
million
number
remain constant however
, visitors
declined in 2016 by 0.5 millions
but it jumped by 0.5 Change to singular
million
millions
in 2017 and reached Change to singular
million
to
the same Change preposition
apply
number
of
2015.
The total Change preposition
in
number
of tourists were
exactly 1 Correct subject-verb agreement
was
millions
in the initial year. It significantly jumped over the year and reached 2.5 Change to a singular noun
million
millions
in 2014. as well it increased by 0.5 Change to singular
million
millions
in 2015 and remain stable Change to singular
million
to
2016 but again remarkably increased and land up to 3.5 Change preposition
in
millions
in Change to singular
million
the
2017.Change the article
apply
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "jumped" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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