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Fast food has become more common in recent years. Some people think that it has a negative effect on lifestyles and diets. Do you agree or disagree?

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Yunk
food
 is the most common
type
 of
meals
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meal
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 in recent years. I agree that
this
 causes a negative effect on
people
's lifestyle and diets because these negatively
affects
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 their health and
this
type
 of diet
are
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is
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 addictive for society. One of the drawbacks of eating
yunk
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junk
food
 in
people
's health is that
this
type
 of
food
 might lead to
suffer
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suffering
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 from
high-cholesterol
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high cholesterol
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 or heart attacks in the years to come. Eating too much salty and greasy
food
 increases the
changes
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chances
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 of suffering from hypertension and
become
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becoming
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 obese
due to
this
 unhealthy
food
. More importantly,
yunk
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junk
food
 is so cheap that
people
 tend to buy it every day because companies like
Mcdonals
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McDonald
,
Carls
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and Carls
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 Junior
offers
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offer
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 big
breaskfast
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breakfast
 or lunch for less than five dollars each meal.
For instance
, in California individuals can find fast
food
 on almost every corner, so
people
 find
convenient
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it convenient
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having
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to have
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 cheap
food
withing
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within
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 local distance. Another negative effect on
peoples'life
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peoples life
 is that
this
type
 of diet is highly addictive, so many individuals can stop buying it. The vast majority of obese
people
 tend to eat greasy
food
 which is salty, tasty and it comes
on
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in
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 huge portions, so
this
lead
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leads
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 them to gain weight. On top of
this
 addiction, these
type
 of meals comes with large size of beverage that has a lot of sugar in it. To explain my point, Fullerton College made a study in 2022 which proved that most
of
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the
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apply
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obese
people
 suffer from
food
 addiction and
somethimes
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sometimes
 they do not even feel hungry, they are just looking for salty hot packages. In conclusion,
yunk
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junk
food
 has detrimental effects on
people
's diet and lifestyle because
this
 lead to
suffer
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suffering
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 from heart diseases, and many of them are addicted to fast
food
. if these bad
food
habbits
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habits
 do not change, many more
people
 will become addicted and will suffer from several diseases.
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