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The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005
#data #developments #resort #templeton
The two maps illustrate the coastal
resort
 of Templeton expansion was enriched over a
15 year
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 period from 1990 to 2005.
Overall
, it is notable from the map that there were major modifications
of
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 the
resort
 which turned into a place full of facilities, including new buildings, a new supermarket, a new ferry and so on. Looking at the evolution in more
details
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, we can see that the seaside
resort
 was divided into two parts opposition in the
West
 and East. In 1990, the zone was a greener area with a large number of trees and individual houses.
However
, in 2005, almost trees located in the South
West
, South East, and North East were cut down, and ,
instead
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 we see the construction of a factory and a ferry in the South East of
map
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 beside the
strecht
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stretch
 of
railway
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the railway
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 which
via
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across from the river to
other
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 side.
Besides
, there was a considerable renovation, these houses and trees were pulled down and replaced by a new supermarket
to
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accompanied by three skyscrapers.
In contrast
, both sites in the North East and North
West
were remained
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remained
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 unchanged. There was erected Several housing behind the hospital,
whereas
 two skyscrapers and a building were constructed near the lake to the North
West
 of the
resort
. A final transformation the empty ground in the left-centre was built into a block of detached houses.
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