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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India`s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India`s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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The bar chart below illustrates
consumer`s
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consumers
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require
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to
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for
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gross
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the gross
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 domestic product of India over the 4 decades, between 1960 and 2000.
Overall
,
agriculture
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the agriculture
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 sector showed
dramatic
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a dramatic
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declining
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decline
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 over the
period
,
while
 industry and services demonstrated
upward
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an upward
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 trend. If
in
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 the beginning of the
period
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,period
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 agriculture was
dominant
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the dominant
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 GDP sector, in 2000 services become most contributed.
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The agriculture
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Agriculture
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 figure was
on
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at
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it`s
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 highest point of just over 60% in 1960,
then
declining
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declined
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 suddenly to reach 12% in 2000.
Industry
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The industry
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 sector started at 15% and raised gradually to 25% in 1980. In the second part of the
period
,
industry
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the industry
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 graph was unchanged. Services become more popular over the
period
. Starting from just under 20%,
is
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it
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 showed dramatic raise until 2000, and reached its highest point of 62%, becoming equal to agriculture`s initial statistics.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.
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