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In many countries, traditional foods are being replaced by international fast foods. Many people think that it is good to eat traditional food while others believe that fast food is a good choice. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, some countries report that many
people
 consume international fast
food
instead
 of traditional
foods
. One of the reasons is cooking fast
food
 is faster than traditional meats, and other reasons can be about prices because fast
foods
 are cheaper than traditional
foods
. In
this
 essay, we try to compare both opinions but I think traditional
foods
 are better than fast
foods
 because it is Nutrient-rich
foods
 and has Local ingredients. On the one hand, some
people
 believe traditional
foods
 are the best choice for a Balanced diet so, they encourage other
people
 to eat traditional
foods
instead
 of fast
foods
 because they blive fast
foods
 can cause Foodborne illnesses and it is a bad habit in diet
food
, and individuals have to leave them.
For example
, nowadays many
people
 suffer from digestive Disease and numerous doctors think eating fast
foods
 is the most important reason for
this
 illness.
On the other hand
, another group believes fast
food
 is better than traditional
food
 because It is more affordable and it is faster and easier to cook than traditional dishes.
For instance
, if you want to make pizza you will need chees, mushroom, a few chicken, Dough, pepper, sauce and other ingredients
while
 if you want to make Gheymeh(it is an Iranian
food
) you will need to Veal, paste, cobs, cinnamon, spices If you pay attention, you can easily notice the price difference. In conclusion, I prefer traditional
food
 because it is much better for my health, but sometimes it is not bad to eat
food
.
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