Chevening is looking for individuals who will be future leaders or influencers in their home countries. Explain how you meet this requirement, using clear examples of your own leadership and influencing skills to support your answer.

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The best sentence in my professional career is “from Zero to Hero”. My first challenge from the company was to lead a
team
in a rural
area
that I had never visited before. Through
this
journey, as Head of Representative
Office
or Hero, I have learned about true leadership that faces any risk and inspires others to grow together for common goals. It comes from my zero experience in the telecommunication industry,
however
, I developed myself to become a good Hero for developing my
area
during my professional career. I have managed three different rural areas in the South of Kalimantan with limited resources which are five
sales
officers and 20 technicians. The challenge is to achieve
sales
, infrastructure, and finance targets. As Hero Kandangan, I must face that obstacle, lead my
team
, and maximize the resources to achieve the target. First of all, I should learn about the culture of the community in my
area
which gave me insight into how I can communicate with others. Improved relationships with the
team
through joint activities
such
as morning briefing, ceremony, and other activities. And
then
conducted demand surveys for the network deployment plan. I have innovated for
sales
improvement through social media and online communities so that even though I have a small number of
sales
officers, I can reach all areas.
As a result
, it increased
sales
by 5.5% each month from online marketing.
Moreover
, my
area
achieved
sales
, infrastructure, and finance targets set by the company and I got the best Head of Representative
Office
in Q2 2020 from my
office
.
On the other hand
, there are other challenges to the cost-efficiency program from my company to the business sustainability. In
this
current condition, my role as
leader
of the maintenance division has to manage a limited budget efficiently but still prioritize customer experience. The activities I did were conducting an initial assessment of each program and evaluating the impact that will be carried out.
Next,
I hold a meeting with the
team
to discuss the planning that will be implemented based on the results of the initial evaluation.
Then
, I controlled the execution of the work in the field.
Finally
, the final evaluation was to assess the work ensure that the customer network is running well, and make lessons learned regarding budget efficiency. Through
this
program, it resulted in 10% cost savings every month and the unit that I manage received the Best Access Operation and Maintenance of Telkom Regional Kalimantan in Q2 2023 from my
office
. In conclusion, a
leader
must be able to provide rational solutions in the midst of limited resources and encourage the
team
to achieve common goals.
This
experience has made me a future
leader
in developing my
area
through telecommunication networks, with the support from Chevening, I hope it will increase my potential to be a great
leader
and make a greater impact through my studies.
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