The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram depicts the way in which instant noodles are produced.
Overall
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, there are 8 stages in the process, beginning with storing flour which serves as the raw material and ending with labelling and sealing.
To begin
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with, trucks upload flour in the storage silos and these storage silos become filled with the main material. Afterwards, flour goes through an adding stage with water and oil.
Then
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, the ingredients undergo a mixing process and the mixer stirs the three ingredients and produces
dough
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sheets.
Following
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this
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, the
dough
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sheets turn to the
dough
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strips which is the primary look of noodles.
Next,
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the
dough
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strips are placed in noodle discs. In the 6th stage, these discs are cooked with oil and dried. In the subsequent stage, cups are filled with cooked noodles and vegetables and spices are added to the cups.
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, the cups are gotten labels and seals which are ready to sell.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dough with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufactured
  • ingredients
  • dough
  • rolled out
  • thin strips
  • steaming process
  • partially cooked
  • fried
  • dehydrating
  • packaged
  • distribution
  • quality control
  • standards
  • flavoring powder
  • sauce packet
  • traditional pasta
  • dehydration
  • instant cooking
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