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The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to present time. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

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The blueprint illustrates the changes that occurred at a
school
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 from 1985 to the present day.
Overall
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, what stands out from the chart is that the floor area remains unchanged over time
whereas
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, different rooms were added and some are removed.
Also
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, the
school
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 population increased significantly in the present day. In 1985, the
school
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's playing fields accounts for the largest area,
while
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 a small
office
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 near the entrance was the smallest. The area had 4 rooms, the library was
then
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 the biggest room which is located behind the
office
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, next to it is a classroom, and
then
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 across
that is
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 a two-storey classroom. The car park is located across the small
office
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 occupying the mid-upper portion of the map.
However
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, at present-day the
school
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 added more chambers. The playing fields and the car park obviously reduce its size. They added a pool and a fitness centre which is built beside each other next to the field.
Additionally
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, the
office
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 and the car park locations remain unchanged.
Moreover
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, behind it is the learning centre,
then
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 a computer room, respectively. There are now 2 classrooms in front of the field,
while
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 the other one is in front of the pool and fitness centre.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school, office with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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