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Some people think cities are the best place to live. Others prefer to live in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #cities #place #countryside
It is argued that living in the urban
area
 will be better than living in the
countryside
.
While
 some
argued
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 that, I
believed
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believe
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 that living in
the
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 modern place
such
 as many big cities have more benefits than rural
area
.
On the other hand
, the lifespan in the city is very
attracting
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 for
individuals
 who want to experience
the
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apply
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fashion and luxury. Owning a lot of high buildings
so
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the view
in
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here is very picturesque.
Individuals
 who can stand up on the high building
so that seeing
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 the landscape of
city
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the city
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.
Furthermore
,
in
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there
,
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is, concentrating
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a concentrating
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concentrating
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 on many cultures, beliefs and various
kind
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kinds
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 of food. You can meet several fashion clothes
shop
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shops
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 on the street,
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and going
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going
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 to
others
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other
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 entertaining infrastructure
such
 as
cinema
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cinemas
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,
mall
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malls
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,
gym
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gyms
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, etc. Not only that, but
also
 it owned to
bustle
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 atmosphere.
For instance
, Da Nang City,
which
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has a substantial amount of abroad visitors.
Thus
,
living
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a living
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 condition
in
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there is very good for
individuals
 who want to improve
quality
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the quality
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 of their life. On the one hand, enjoying
the
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a
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 peaceful life
such
 as
countryside
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the countryside
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also
 has advantages. In there, the clear atmosphere is good for
individuals
 who want to
resting
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. The landscape of
rural
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the rural
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area
 is naturally sightseeing, being suitable for one who
like
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likes
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 to
relaxing
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.
Furthermore
, it
also
 avoids
to
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noises
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noise
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 and exhaust
are
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caused by transport. The cost of living in rural
area
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areas
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 is fit for those who live freely.
For example
,
in
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here, they can create food and vegetables
lonely
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alone
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. Their lifetime happened peacefully
that
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 nothing can damage it. In conclusion, living in the downtown or
countryside
 has its own positive sides, and it depends on the preference of each individual. I personally choose to live in the urban
area
 to enhance my career and plan to live in the
countryside
 when I retire.
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