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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. what is your opinion about this? what other time in history would be interesting to live in?

#people #time #history
"
This
time
 is the best period of
life
 in the history of living" some
people
 believe. I think.
This
 opinion in some aspects is true, but I believe, that living in other times was enjoyable. Since the progress of
technology
 has improved
people
's lives, it can develop their satisfaction.
Firstly
, after a short
time
 easy access to necessary equipment is a main acquisition of
technology
 for them, thrifty on
time
 is more important in their
life
.
Secondly
, regardless of
time
,
this
 period of
time
 illustrates the level of science related to
people
's lives, which indicates their interest in increasing their information about different applicable Sciences in
life
.
Finally
, the significance of the functional acts related to developing numerous vehicles.
For instance
, the trip to other places across the world is so comfortable now with the plane, high-speed train or even progressive taxi that's now can be driven without a driver. In my opinion, consuming
this
 kind of high-level
technology
 is a hobbit, extremely, leave it will be too hard, but in my point of view,
this
 level of
life
 is more enjoyable.
Although
, if the lives of
people
 are impacted by
technology
, it certainly is helpful to have a comfortable
life
, we observe a reduction in real relationships among
people
 and they tend to spend more
time
 alone or in a small group
that is
 related to their aim. At other times,the
people
 preferred to share equipment with each other and
then
 continued their communication
According to
 their feelings. Actually, having a big family was a wish for everyone, because of its assistance. In my opinion, two periods of
time
 are enjoyable for everyone, and the level of their pleasure depends on their situation and wants. In conclusion, I think, if we have a clear attitude about each
time
 of our
life
 certainly, choice one of them will be enjoyable in our
life
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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