the charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in housholds in one country between 1920 and 2019.
The charts illustrate the trends in
possession
of electrical devices and how much time Correct article usage
the possession
do
Unnecessary verb
apply
the
people at home Correct article usage
apply
use
them to do house work
in one specific country in six years.
In the Correct your spelling
housework
first
chart
we can compare Add a comma
,chart
percentage
of Add an article
the percentage
having
washing Unnecessary verb
apply
machine
, Fix the agreement mistake
machines
refrigerator
and vacuum Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
cleaner
between 1920 and 2019.The Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
refrigerator
in the first
year with the negligible amount is the lowest percentage. While
,
the dominion of the washing Remove the comma
apply
machine
in the highest with 40ration in 1920. Moreover
, au three electrical appliances are having increase pattern. The use
of refrigerator
Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
has
picked Unnecessary verb
apply
to
100 percent in 1960 and Change preposition
up to
remain
steady Wrong verb form
remained
to
the end of the period. Change preposition
until
Furthermore
, all the people use
vacuum Wrong verb form
used
cleaner
in 2000 after a Fix the agreement mistake
cleaners
slightly
rise during the Change the adverb
slight
first
four years. Meanwhile, the ownerships
of washing Fix the agreement mistake
ownership
machine
fluctuate.
In the second chart
we can Add a comma
,chart
observed
Change the verb form
observe
that
the number of Correct word choice
apply
hours
but it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
decline
to 20 Change the form of the verb
declined
hours
in 1960.
Then
/the hours
of spending per house hold
not only Correct your spelling
household
stay
around 10 Wrong verb form
stayed
hours
but also
fall
into the minimum usage in 2019.
Wrong verb form
fell
Overall
, The use
washing
Change preposition
of washing
machine
is the maximum bonus in 1920 and Fix the agreement mistake
machines
also
the minimum clunk in 2019. On the other hand
, people
consumption of Change noun form
people's
refrigerator
is the Fix the agreement mistake
refrigerators
least
percentage of Correct word choice
lowest
first
but in hit the chart at the end
. In addition
, the amount of time spent doing house work
has a Correct your spelling
housework
decreas
pattern.Correct your spelling
decreased
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