The chart below shows the male and female internet users aged that 15-24 in 2000.
The given bar chart compares Canadian
men
and women
aged between 15 and 24 based on their online activities in 2000.
Overall
, both males and females had the highest tendency to use email services in 2000. Moreover
, while
young men
contributed more than women
to social networks, women
were likely to use online shopping services more than men
.
Email was the most popular internet service with just below 50% of women
and approximately 40% of men
using it. Furthermore
, almost a quarter of both genders took advantage of social networking although
the figure for men
was a little higher (28%).
Online shopping ranked third. While
19% of women
used online shops to buy, men
were more reluctant with only 13% of them purchasing products available on Add an article
the internet
internet
. Capitalize word
Internet
Finally
, 18% of men
used Correct article usage
the internet
internet
for other activities Capitalize word
Internet
while
this
number was just under 10% for women
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