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It is better to buy just fex expensie clothes, rather than lots of cheaper clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

#fex #expensie #clothes #lots
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Although
 many
people
 assert that purchasing expensive
clothes
 is wasting money, I am inclined to believe that it is better if we prefer costly options. In
this
 essay, I will elaborate on both views by giving proper examples. On the one hand, a lot of individuals prefer to get high-quality clothing
brands
 even if they are high-priced, as they believe that these
brands
 use top materials to produce their goods. These products are expensive, but many of them have a simple and classic design and are of high quality that can be worn for a longer time.
For instance
, a person can wear a pair of shoes from a well-known brand like Versace, Dolce Gabbana, or Ecco, for a longer time as these shoes are produced from perfect materials.
On the other hand
, another group of
people
 believe that human beings need a variety of models,
colors
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, and styles that would be limited to wearing expensive
clothes
.
Therefore
, ordinary, middle-class
people
 and individuals with lower amount of income would not be able to buy a lot of
clothes
 unless they go for less expensive options.
Accordingly
, buying cheaper
clothes
 allows these
people
 to have various options to put on. Meanwhile, there are some fast fashion
brands
 that produce
clothes
 at lower prices but with acceptable quality so that
people
 can buy their
clothes
.
For example
, Zara, considered one of the fast fashion
brands
, has a lot of models with reasonable prices for those who are interested in wearing different models per season. In conclusion, I do believe that purchasing less expensive or high-priced
clothes
 is a personal preference based upon conditions
people
 have in their lives.
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Task Response
Consider adding a more direct and explicit introduction to your opinion. Though you state your inclination, it's important to clearly articulate your stance in the introduction.
Task Response
Although you present ideas for both views, ensure your thesis aligns with your conclusion. Your essay should consistently support your initial stance throughout.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on creating a more cohesive flow between paragraphs. Transition sentences can help to guide the reader from one argument to the next more smoothly.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure each paragraph begins with a clear topic sentence that signals the main idea to the reader. This practice strengthens the structure of your essay.
Task Achievement
Provide a more balanced discussion. While you offer examples for each viewpoint, ensure that your argument is not outweighed by the counter-argument's examples.

Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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