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Nowadays many people believe that inspite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. why is this the case? what can be done about this problem?

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These days, it is a general perception in the public, that regardless of the technological achievements in the
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 sector, we can't address the global hunger issue. The notable reason which led to
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 dilemma is the ownership of vast agricultural lands and resources by
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 companies.
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 these companies in return help poor and destitute
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 to fight hunger,
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 effort is like peanuts to address
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 global crisis.
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 essay will dive into the causes of
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 shortage and efforts in
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 regard.
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, renowned
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 outlets nowadays, are purchasing lands of critical importance in order to produce
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 for wealthy nations.
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,
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 results in making
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destitute
people
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's lives miserable who are leaving them with barren lands that are not suitable for
agriculture
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.
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, Coca-Cola and Nestle have their production plants near water reservoirs, which results in utilizing all the reservoir water for their own purpose and pushing
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 to use their products as the leftover water is of not good quality.
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, these business tycoons are responsible for creating hunger for their own profitability.
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, contrary to
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, these companies invest some of their resources in
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-friendly, health-beneficial programs to create a delusion that they are not the real culprits for
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food
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 scarcity issue.
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, a hectic amount of money is invested in research programs to improve
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.
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, Nestle alone is investing multi-million dollars in the improvement of the
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 sector to save their billion-dollar industry undercover. So: all these
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 of helping the common man, result in the suffering of common
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 who are forced to purchase expensive
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 or remain hungry.
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, our agricultural techniques no doubt result in better
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 production these days, but
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 giants are snatching all these benefits, resulting in a more difficult life for general
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.
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, the resulting efforts are not beneficial to overcome
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 global issue.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
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