In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages?

In some cultures,

children

attempt to work hard to achieve everything that they want. I strongly believe that despite some virtues of

children

try

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hard to obtain anything

such

as

sense

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a sense

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of satisfaction and motive

them

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apply

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to achieve anything, some

children

experience

failures

that they feel

depression

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depressed

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. To commence with,

children

are interested in achieving everything they want since they were born. They make efforts to obtain anything by doing hard work. Working hard can help

children

to

gain

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achieve

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their aims or everything they want faster.

This

can assist

children

to satisfy their

lives

and

motive

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motivate

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them to try harder.

For instance

, in the school,

children

study hard to get

good

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a good

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score from the teacher. Before exams, they more

consentrate

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concentrate

concentrated

on their studies

instead

of doing

favourite

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their favourite

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activities, because they know that if they study hard, they will get

good

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a good

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score

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scores

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.

Therefore

, they spend

their

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apply

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most time

in

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apply

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studing

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studying

to achieve their goals, and they experience

feeling

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a feeling

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of satisfaction

,

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and

continuing

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continue

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this

behavior

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behaviour

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for their future

lives

. Because of that they can

also

positive impact on

the

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society in the long run. On the flip side,

children

decide to achieve everything they want by trying hard enough,

although

, sometimes they experience

failures

that can influence

of

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apply

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children

’s notions. They feel

depression

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depressed

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if they work hard and do not achieve their aims.

Therefore

, it is said that success and failure can have a direct effect on

children

’s feelings and even their future

lives

.

For example

, my cousin did puzzles and took part in many competitions. She tried hard to win and get top-rank among other competitors, but she failed one of the

constents

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contents

constants

, and after

that

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,that

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she felt depressed for a long time. In conclusion,

although

trying hard is one of the key factors

of

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in

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achieving everything and

children

feel happiness and satisfaction

to follow

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in following

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their aims,

failures

can have detrimental effects on

children

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children's

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behaviours. We should not ignore the crucial role of

failures

that can affect directly

on

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apply

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children

’s

lives

.