Some people say that the clothes people wear are the most important indication of what they are like. Others, however, say that people should not be judged by the clothes they wear. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons of your answers and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

Some
people
argue that
people
tend to wear
the
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apply
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clothes
which
indicates
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indicate
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their
preference
.
On the other hand
, others say that the
clothes
is
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apply
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worn
does
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do
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not
telling
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tell
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anything. Regardless of
this
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these
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two notions,
this
paper will discuss both of them and state the opinion in the end. Most
people
believe that
choose
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choosing
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the right
clothes
represents many things as
a
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apply
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personality
and social status.
This
notion can be understood since
people
are trying to make
good
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a good
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impression especially on the first meeting.
For
example
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,example
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when
people
have
the
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an
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interview for work,
people
want to be seen as
people
who have a good
personality
,
trustworthy
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are trustworthy
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, and
serious
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are serious
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to get
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about getting
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the job.
Hence
, they are trying to
use
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wear
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formal
clothes
rather than the casual
one
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ones
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. Another thing about
clothes
that
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is that
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, somehow it indicates social status when
people
want to maintain an image as rich or wealthy
people
.
For instance
, in
the
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apply
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term
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terms
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of
gain
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gaining
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more attention from
public
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the public
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and
to sustain
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sustaining
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the
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a
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glamorous lifestyle, celebrities are keen to wear expensive
clothes
from prominent brands to make them
looked
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look
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fancy in front of
public
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the public
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.
However
, there are still
people
think
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who think
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that
the
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apply
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clothes
should not be an indicator to see what
people
’s
preference
since
the
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apply
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clothes
is
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are
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only about
the
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apply
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function and nothing more than that. By arguing
this
means
clothes
can be used as simple as to protect
body
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the body
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,
for instance
from extreme weather like using jacket or sweater in winter season or using t-shirt when
go
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going
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to
beach
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the beach
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in
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on
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sunny day.
Clothes
are nothing about
people
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people's
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personality
or
preference
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preferences
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but only to cover the body. I personally think that
people
should not be judged by anything they wear, since it is not fair; even I will be angry if my
personality
is judged by my
clothes
. I think we should see
clothes
only because of
it’s
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its
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function and based on our needs. There are many areas
can
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that can
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be indicate
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indicate
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what
people
is
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are
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like
for example
from
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apply
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how
the
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they
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manage their money and how they manage their relationship with others. Those things still can tell many things more than what the
clothes
is
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are
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shown. In conclusion, some
people
might judge
people
’s
preference
by their
clothes
and some might not, since
clothes
is only
clothes
, nothing more.
Hence
,
i
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I
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tend
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totend
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see
clothes
as they are without
asscosiating
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associating
it
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them
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with
people
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people's
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personality
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personalities
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because it is just unfair.
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