The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate in fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013.
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frequency
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the frequency
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of eating habits at junk food
place
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places
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among
people
in the United States from 2003 to 2013.
Overall
, the highest
trends
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when
people
eating
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fast
snack
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is within once a week and once or twice a month. In 2003, the highest trend held
in
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once a week which got more than 30% even though it is still not as high as in 2006 which more higher than all three different trends which got 33%.
Furthermore
, 2013
also
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a peak season too which
people
usually ate fast goodies once or twice a month at 33%.
However
,
people
are rarely feed
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comfort food
everyday
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in three different years
which
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in 2003, 2006 and 2013, the percentage
is
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under 5%.
This
is
also
true with
people
who never ate convenience
meal
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, the data shows it is under 5% too, even though in 2006 and 2014,
people
shows
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the same percentage which at 4%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fast food consumption
  • Frequency
  • Dining trends
  • Demographic factors
  • Peak periods
  • Downward/upward trend
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Nutritional awareness
  • Economic impact
  • Health implications
  • Convenience foods
  • Eating habits
  • Statistical evidence
  • Year-over-year comparison
  • Fluctuation
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